The doe eyed stared with a  mysterious look
gently rustling amidst the woods
fleeing  in  the dense  forests,
as my heart gets hooked…
Long slender leaves make
a perfect camouflage
peeping from behind the blades
a silhouette of charismatic gaze…
Wondrous walk ,measured steps,
fragrance spreads as she shakes her head
in the dark sultry nights,
hypnotizing is her image…
Starry sky twinkles
as she slips on  her derriere
glossy skin radiates
spell bounded I watch
the piquant …
submerging in the ocean like a mermaid!

35 thoughts on “THE DOE EYED !

  1. himani16 April 30, 2013 / 11:24 am

    that was beautiful! wondering, are you on fb by any chance? would love to connect🙂

    • soumyav April 30, 2013 / 11:27 am

      Yes page is “poems of life”

        • soumyav May 1, 2013 / 10:30 am

          🙂 Glad to be connected there too Shawn!

    • soumyav April 30, 2013 / 11:27 am

      Many thanks James for loving this!

  2. Madhu April 30, 2013 / 11:36 am

    Beautiful! Are you referring to a deer?
    Didn’t quite get “….as she slips on her derriere”😀

    • Madhu April 30, 2013 / 11:38 am

      The moon!🙂

      • soumyav April 30, 2013 / 11:42 am

        🙂 Dnt get confused dear about the deer! its doe eyed,but not a deer.. and slipped on derriere…slipped on her back… to slid into the waters.. as a mermaid..🙂

        • Madhu April 30, 2013 / 12:57 pm

          Ha, just my foggy morning brain🙂

          • soumyav April 30, 2013 / 1:33 pm

            wow! tht means you are having a great treat from weather! 🙂

  3. Blood-Ink-Diary April 30, 2013 / 12:00 pm

    A great symphony of the deer and mermaid – only if I could transform into a mermaid -who is not susceptible to human angst. Lekin — hazaaron khwahishein aisi….

    The poetry echoes serenity and pierces an awakening – leading to cathartic – beautifully, my dear Soumy. Blessing to your soul.
    p.s. shall respond to your email – had such a taxing day – want to write in luxury.🙂

    • Blood-Ink-Diary April 30, 2013 / 12:09 pm

      And, of course, the ‘deer’ I mention is for our dear Madhu – am teasing her – all in good faith!🙂

    • soumyav April 30, 2013 / 2:01 pm

      Thank you dear for you wonderful perspective,yet again intoxicating with intensity. How beautiful are our fantasies and imaginations when the pen starts writing it never fails to surprise us..
      It is ok take your time,by the way have mailed you another one a queue.🙂

  4. Eric Alagan April 30, 2013 / 1:39 pm

    This is tangential – it can be a maiden but — your words drew more —

    I saw this as a doe-eyed deer picking her way through the brush, morphing with her steps into a beautiful maiden – then into a mermaid who slips and slips into her blue world. Witnessed — spied even — by the twinkling stars.

    Enchanting read – loved it.

    A good one, Soumya, dear.

    • soumyav April 30, 2013 / 2:02 pm

      You summarized it the way exactly as I had actually perceived it ! Eventually I changed my words and lines but I think the effect still remained there only to be caught by you!
      Thanks Eric!

  5. SinPSarkar April 30, 2013 / 2:51 pm

    This was beautifull!🙂 Quite picturesque and I could see that Marmaid!🙂

    • soumyav April 30, 2013 / 3:20 pm

      Thanks a lot ! Quite happy to see you after so long! Hope the new job is fine .

  6. vishalbheeroo April 30, 2013 / 5:56 pm

    I take a bow:)

    • soumyav May 1, 2013 / 10:31 am

      🙂 Oh! Then I too have too!

    • soumyav May 1, 2013 / 10:30 am

      🙂 Thank you my dear

  7. Wendell A. Brown April 30, 2013 / 8:25 pm

    Your words are always a sweet morning serenade to me dear sister…thanks for the beautiful blessing! God bless!

    • soumyav May 1, 2013 / 10:30 am

      My honour Wendell ! Thanks for this

    • soumyav May 1, 2013 / 10:24 am

      My pleasure Lisa, for you liked the simple imagery.

  8. lvsrao May 1, 2013 / 10:38 am

    Beautiful. Very Nice narration.

  9. tornadoday May 1, 2013 / 9:11 pm

    The grace that is you really comes through in this one, Soumyav. I love it……. ~ Bobbie

    • soumyav May 2, 2013 / 9:58 am

      Thanks and love,Bobbie

  10. Allwin Bright May 4, 2013 / 6:27 am

    To be honest I did not get it on the first read. Had to read all the comments and the poem again. The tube-light that I am😦

    I just realized that this was one of the most beautiful poems I’ve read.

    • soumyav May 4, 2013 / 10:15 am

      🙂 My pleasure you went through it again to read and understand !

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