WRITTEN FOR ERMILIA”S BLOG: http://wp.me/p1HrCI-13p
PICTURE IT AND WRITE!
She was the darling of his eyes,
he loved her like a bemused lover
years they lived together
never went away
from each other…
fairy tale their life seemed,
happiness in full measure,
every man passing by
would get envy of such beautiful composure…
Jealous eyes reached them once
casting spell on their treasure,
one fateful night,
he went alone
never again he returned from his leisure…
Years later …
the story was written…
.
.
an accident had occured…
the lover got killed on the spot,
the girl was unaware of the trouble,
that very night a storm washed
the lanes of the small village,
the young girl got drenched
and got carried away for miles …
with the flooded waters…
.
.
.
Today a colourful butterfly
rests in peace
and dwells in his dried eyes…forever
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what a hollow story.
Am I supposed to be relieved that the butterfly was there, in his place? Supposed to bring solace to thier loss?
Still makes me feel sad.
So well written, Soumyav.
Thank you dear.sometimes such endings leave open ended conclusions.. we remain happy with whatever we want to assume ! As if not stating the climax ,gives reader the freedom to have one of his own!
I completely understand that. I try to write like that, as well. Leave it up for the readers interpretation.
I see that in song writting a lot.
Good to see you got involved with the story! 🙂
Tragedy but love finds a way to survive.
very true! and yes it did find its way!
A tight read, Soumyav. I feel for this couple–such a sad fate did they suffer. I love how you ended the piece with the butterfly being the interesting puzzle. I like what comes to my mind.
Nice to know Uzo you enjoyed the climax and also that you could get connected with the story of the butterfly there!
soumya i couldn’t resist.. i simply re-blogged this one my blog… loved it…!!
:-):-) Thank you Shiv!
Very moving I like it
So glad Gys!
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Thanks a lot Gys.
Oh, so sad…!
Lovely, Soumyav; a feel a tear coming on…. 😉
Thanks Carolyn! could think of this after seeing the pic.
SO TOUCHING, SOUMYA.
Thank you Sir
I like how neatly you took your different impressions and put them all together. Very nice.
So lovely to read your thoughts about the poem Anne! its always a pleasure and honour when you comment ! 🙂
what a fairy tale this is… romantic and bittersweet.. a little sad but a little glad that they still had their “ever after” 🙂
Yes ! a hope for everything and a very typical brightness of yours…there is good in everything … 🙂 Thanks Kz
Inspiring. Well that id life.
true!
very sad and absolutely beautiful!
Had to be sad ,the picture could not invoke anything else..it had to be touching