THE PROPOSAL


” Like a gentleman,I would wait until you think of giving  up yourself “,he uttered

I smiled and grinned to say,”such a day will never come,you keep on waiting till death takes me away”.

“What makes you say such strong harsh words,breaking my dreams and lie in clutter,

Do you not wait for the same ,yearning to be my damsel in distress?”

 

“I do “,I said,but not in such a  way,

I want to be  like a princess  who walks through the aisle,

who gloriously can gleam with a shine in her eyes,

convince herself that he is the one who can fill her void sighs.

 

Silence prevailed ,dew drops shined,on the leaves the moonlight smiled,

traversing to the land where she realized the thought,

the next morn came and she lay like a dead corpse!

 

 

(PHOTOCREDIT:amandalassiterphotography.com)

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24 thoughts on “THE PROPOSAL

  1. Uzoma February 9, 2013 / 4:07 pm

    OMG! This is a fantastic writing! It’s short, tight, and well described. Poor lady, she never saw the next morn but only on the other side. What inspired this, Soumyav?

    • soumyav February 9, 2013 / 6:33 pm

      Thank you Uzo ! Good that you liked,I was hesitant to write this but somehow managed. just inspired by a conversation heard!

    • soumyav February 9, 2013 / 6:35 pm

      THank you Pragati!

  2. Shakti Ghosal February 9, 2013 / 5:48 pm

    Is there a prologue to this verse that I have missed, Soumyav? What otherwise could have led to the sudden demise of this beautiful damsel, so full of dreams for the morrow?

    Shakti

    • soumyav February 9, 2013 / 6:36 pm

      NO Shakti!! you didn’t miss any prologue ! It is left to the reader to decide whether she actually died,or gave up to him or she was on verge of dying or its just a metaphor that she was lying in peace!

  3. muZer February 9, 2013 / 7:22 pm

    Awww.. Heartbreaking yet so beautiful and mystical. I like the idea of lying in peace and interpret it as she let him move on while her search is on. Wonderful post, Soumya.

    • soumyav February 9, 2013 / 7:25 pm

      Thank you dear! you even encourage me with your wonderful words of thoughts and views.

      • muZer February 9, 2013 / 7:27 pm

        Aww.. Be encouraged always, you inspire a lot of people, me included.. 🙂

  4. Tatsat February 9, 2013 / 9:41 pm

    Arre hadd ho gayi 🙂 I love happy endings and this seems to be like an anticlimax in that regard 😛
    This might be the first short story I have read in a long long time. Good effort !

    • soumyav February 9, 2013 / 9:45 pm

      :-):-) sometimes I should also go for an opposite trend of mine! so in form of an end without details,I left it,it,its upto you now,to translate the meaning! 🙂

      • Tatsat February 9, 2013 / 9:49 pm

        It is open ended- that I know. But with the backdrop you had built ,and “like a” dead corpse, I did not know what to conclude! Perplexing. It definitely had my attention 🙂

        • soumyav February 9, 2013 / 9:50 pm

          contemplate! 🙂

  5. Eric Alagan February 10, 2013 / 11:25 am

    How did I miss this!

    Bitter sweet —- and enduring — love and unrequited love. Now they both wait or eternity.

    • soumyav February 10, 2013 / 1:48 pm

      Thank you Eric ! Am so glad you went through some of my poems today.great to see u here after a long time! 🙂

    • soumyav February 10, 2013 / 6:24 pm

      Thank you Meenakshi

  6. sakshivashist February 10, 2013 / 9:08 pm

    Unusual ending…
    No cliche.
    I like it 🙂

    • soumyav February 10, 2013 / 10:48 pm

      Thank you Saakshi

  7. Wendell A. Brown February 11, 2013 / 12:00 am

    You are certainly a great poet and writer my sister. You do it all well! God bless!

  8. SinPSarkar February 11, 2013 / 5:41 am

    This is beautiful! And the silent end in the last stanza is a beautiful one to read over and again! 🙂

    • soumyav February 11, 2013 / 7:33 am

      So good to hear you liked it and got into it.

  9. tornadoday February 11, 2013 / 8:41 pm

    Or rather, she simply floated away to find real destiny. She wasn’t dead; only dead to him. 🙂 Love it, Soumyav. ~ Always, Bobbie

    • soumyav February 11, 2013 / 10:47 pm

      NIce interpretation Bobbie! love the thought of your hope in the seeking

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