It was New year’s Eve. Everyone was busy in their own little world of celebrating! Candles, Lights,Gifts  brought merriness to the homes that rowed up beside the street where she was walking.

The glee and the sound of laughs along with merry music filled the atmosphere …yet something was missing and made the surroundings dull and gloomy.A voice was missing,a feeling was unfelt, a void was felt.She returned back to her place retracing her steps and thoughts.

She always had loved the beauty of everything around her. Her twinkling observations made her heart glow and even sulk in a minute when no one would understand and realize the happiness of the surroundings.

It was  the festival time everywhere and life had been very sarcastic with her.She was alone awaiting for happiness to knock her door.

Somehow she had managed to decorate the house with beautiful artistry and flowers. Flowers which  she loved a lot,the ones who were always by her side,no matter what!

These mute tiny bunches always spread the smiles !






She touched the pretty yellow lily dangling out of the porcelain vase,as if it had been waiting for her warmth.

How steadily she craved for his presence beside in the glowing nights of the dark.

Yearning for the sapphire sky to come and kiss along,with the blessings that showered on them few years back ,when nothing went wrong.

Strange had been the time ,when things get reversed,a  blissful moment can turn around and leave everything shattered.

She had  valued life and always awaited for him to do so.

Untill then it was a casual careless affair…

She scribbled the words down in her mind and tried to reach for a blue pen on the table to write the thoughts that had just flooded her heart.She could not get the pen in hand nor was she able to hold the pen,for her sense had been lost and she forgot she wasn’t of this world anymore.

Suddenly there was  a knock at the door behind, the keys turned around and he stepped in,as he used to , with  his usual sight…only that he could not see her any longer.


23 thoughts on “IMMORTAL !

  1. JasmineKyleSings December 18, 2012 / 10:50 pm

    her sense had been lost and she forgot she wasn’t of this world anymore
    Oh how terrible! I was not prepared for her to be dead! It was BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN short story!

    • soumyav December 18, 2012 / 10:55 pm

      Thanks Jasmine! and Iam glad you did enjoy and liked! I too didn’t know I would be ending it like this!

    • soumyav December 18, 2012 / 10:55 pm

      Thanks Jasmine! and Iam glad you did enjoy and liked! I too didn’t know I would be ending it like this!

      • JasmineKyleSings December 18, 2012 / 11:01 pm

        OOOH your one of THOSE writers… so cruel to your characters to wake your readers!!! VERY CLEVER!!!

        • soumyav December 18, 2012 / 11:08 pm

          nothing like that! I just wanted to emphasize on the value of life,which we lose and get lost in the living. I wanted to make the character immortal as a soul which still craved for love and happiness even after leaving the world..

          • JasmineKyleSings December 18, 2012 / 11:14 pm

            OH THAT’s SO OOOOO SAD!!!! OH Poor thing…. OH how tragic….

  2. muZer December 19, 2012 / 2:34 am

    Whoa.. That’s quite a story.. Bittersweet.. And tragic but so well told. I felt for her longing and her pain!

    • soumyav December 19, 2012 / 9:53 am

      Thank yo for goingthrough and liking it Muzer!

  3. Meenakshi Malhotra December 19, 2012 / 8:10 am

    Oh, the end was startling! My heart goes to the poor chap who entered the home to find out what he just lost!

    • soumyav December 19, 2012 / 10:03 am

      It was just meant to make all realize value everything that you have now,later it is too late !

  4. lgyslaine December 19, 2012 / 1:58 pm

    Beautiful text which gives a definitely consider. For my part, I think we never dies completely. There is always something. 🙂

  5. umashankar December 20, 2012 / 3:08 pm

    The end is stunning: it makes the story.

    • soumyav December 26, 2012 / 4:00 pm

      Thank you so much!

  6. elamany December 27, 2012 / 11:42 pm

    O, so sad, so sentimental … you made me cry, hats off and thumbs up, Soumaya. Great post.

    • soumyav December 27, 2012 / 11:46 pm

      Thank you Amany! for being here and reading.

      • elamany December 27, 2012 / 11:56 pm

        the pleasure is mine Dear. 🙂

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